Mack is a young man at the age of 13 years old who has one of the greatest businesses in the world, a unicorn farm. He had just been given a unicorn that is worth millions of dollars; what will he did with it? Mack possesses the gift of the world and he doesn’t want any part to do with it. What if you possess the gift of the world, what would you do if you had the gift?
This has a nice start. Consider ending your hook with what Mack might do with this expensive unicorn. The readers may have their own ideas of what they might do, but they have no ability to project their opinion into the author's story.
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